The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
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From birth to mature fish, the
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's development process is depicted in the diagram. It is evident that there are seven stages, starting from incubation and finishing the cycle of maturity with migration to spawning areas.
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, the most notable feature is the moving of
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over three various locations, namely river and estuary, and ocean. The process commences when adult fishes incubate their eggs, continued by emergence from eggs. Afterwards, during a certain stage of development, the young
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spend the next stage of their lives being reared in freshwater areas. It
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continues with fish swimming in the estuary followed by the
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swimming to the ocean.After the first main six stages,
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pass through and relocate to rearing territory. In the
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step, as soon as the
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is sufficiently grown and maturation is complete, they migrate to spanning areas where the cycle starts over again, including reproducing their eggs, and travelling between river and ocean.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Salmon
  • Spawn
  • Egg
  • Alevin
  • Fry
  • Parr
  • Smolt
  • Freshwater
  • Saltwater
  • Adaptation
  • Physiological changes
  • Habitat
  • Predators
  • Survival
  • Ecosystem
  • Migratory patterns
  • Reproductive cycle
  • Environmental factors
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