The supplied bar chart above represents data on the US`s top ten processed food exports for last year and six year ago.

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The supplied bar chart above represents data on the US`s top ten processed

food

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exports for

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year

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and six

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ago.

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, in the

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year

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the profits from

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product

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noticebly

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increased. As can be seen for countries located in South America United States are

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the

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processed

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considerably

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than for other states. The chart clearly shows that in both years the US earn 22,5 and 10,1 billion dollars from neighbors Canada and Mexica respectively. In the

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comparison

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Hong Kong

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received

processed

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costs

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over 1.1 billion dollars. All European Union bought

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products

for 7

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China and South Korea together spent 5.4

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. It could be plainly viewed that the earnings in

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year

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more for approximately two times what they were six years ago. Profits from all countries are increased

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about 30

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, the

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advantage for Us from Japan`s processed

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only 100 million dollars and almost stayed in

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way.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, year with synonyms.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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The supplied bar chart above represents data on the US`s top ten processed food exports for last year and six year ago.

More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree

'It is often argued that children must be protected from unsuitable material on TV and the Internet by government censorship. Others say that this is the parents' responsibility to control what their children do and watch. To what extent do you think that this is true?

In the future, people may no longer be able to pay things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phone. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

All the people in a company should be treated equally and provided with the same numbers of vacations in a year.To what extent do you agree or disagree?