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The maps show the developments which took place an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The maps show the developments which took place an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The maps show the developments which took place
an
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on an
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island
, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely empty area to tourist facilities.
To begin
 with
island
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an island
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 surrounded by the sea was absolutely empty,
no
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with no
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 more construction for
tourist
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tourists
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. The beach can be considered exceptional
,
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apply
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 but without
possibility
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the possibility
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to
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of
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swimming
Correct article usage
a swimming
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 area.
Then
 an
island
 experienced some changes in layout.
Firstly
, was built accommodation on both
side
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sides
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 for people who would live there with
footpath
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a footpath
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 to walk. Upside the
island
located
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is located
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restaurant
Correct article usage
the restaurant
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,
lower
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and lower
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 down located reception which is circled by
vehicle
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a vehicle
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 track. The vehicle track continues to the pier. The pier
installed
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is installed
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 on the downside part of the
island
 where boats are parks there. On the left side of the accommodation was
paved
Correct article usage
a paved
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 footpath to the beach. The beach was fenced with a swimming area
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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