you are a member of a sports centre and you have noticed a problem which has not been fixed for some time. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter •tell the manager about the problem •explain how this issue is affecting your experience at the gym •tell the manager what you would like to happen

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Hello Sir I am a regular member of your sports centre and writing to draw your attention to the broken lock of one of the

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bathrooms. As you are aware that evenings are the busiest day part of your centre, and everyone uses the bathroom to get a shower after their workout. It often gets

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in the bathroom areas, and

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people have to wait in line-ups to get their turn.

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situation has become worse since the lock of one of the bathrooms has been broken. Now, we are left with only two bathrooms which are causing inconvenience to all the members. To avoid

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situation, I thought of coming in the morning, but it did not work for me either because of my office schedule

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and lately, I intentionally missed my workout as I did not want to wait in line for hours.

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is why, I request that you could arrange an appointment with a locksmith at the earliest so that members can enjoy their workout without any hassle. I would greatly appreciate your efforts. Thank you Yours sincerely Gurjot Kaur

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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8 paragraphs

187 words

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