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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps detail the changes from 1920 to today in Grand
Park
. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
park
 added and expanded areas mainly related to entertainment including a larger stage and various areas for recreation. There was
also
 significant relocation in terms of seating and the only areas that remained the same were the entrances and one minor
garden
. The most striking change is in the centre of the
park
 where the fountain has
removed
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 in favour of a rose
garden
 with full seating around it. To the left of the new
garden
, the previous stage for musicians has been turned into a much larger
ampitheatre
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amphitheatre
 facing the opposite direction that will allow for concerts in the
park
.
This
 change has necessitated the removal of both seating on the far left side
as well as
 the rose
garden
 in the bottom left corner of the map. The entrances at the top and bottom in the middle have remained unchanged but on the right side a cafe has replaced the rose
garden
 and where there was a pond for water plants in the top right corner, there is now a children’s play area.
Instead
 of the pond, a water feature has been built occupying the bottom right corner (replacing a glasshouse and some seats).
Finally
, leading to the water
park
 is a new entrance for an underground car
park
.
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