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Science is more useful than human judgement in stopping crime. To what extent do you agree?

#science #judgement #crime
There are some ways to stop criminal activities, including
science
 and human judgment. In
this
 case,
science
 can give
significant
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 results than human judgement, which could be more helpful than other types of solutions.
By applying
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DNA
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a DNA
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check
 and the
result
 of
science
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the science
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check
 is more objective.
To begin
 with,
DNA
check
 is the exact
science
 resource that can be used to investigate various types of violence.
In addition
, the
result
 of a
DNA
check
 will be more objective because it is checked by experts.
However
,
DNA
 has a little weakness which can be manipulated by one or two people that have no integrity in working.
Thus
, people who work in the police department or some other related
investigation
 institutions have to be more aware of the process of
DNA
check
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. By setting a high standard of
investigation
, the
DNA
check
 is still more relevant these days, as it does not need
longer
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 time to wait for its results. Another reason
that
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science
 is more beneficial than human judgement. The
result
 of
science
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investigation
 is more objective.
For instance
, the
lie-detector
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 is one of the
science
 tools that has been developed around the world. Some lawmakers
institutions
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and institutions
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 around the world have started to use it owing to the
result
 of the lie-detector presenting
the
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objectivity. By using
this
result
, every
investigation
 institution can make some efforts to stop
the
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crime in sophisticated ways.
To conclude
,
science
 is more reliable to stop
the
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violence. In stating the two reasons above, I believe that many people will see clearly in terms of accuracy and objectivity so they can always be aware of everything related to investigating crime. In the end,
Science
 has already assisted many lawmakers' employees to find the suspect and assist the victims to finish their
case
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.
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