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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Describe the main features of the figure

The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Describe the main features of the figure
The table compares the information about the pay scale of secondary and high school
teachers
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 from various countries in 2009.
Overall
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,
teachers
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 from
Luxembourg
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 had both the highest starting and maximum salaries. Another interesting feature is that
teachers
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 in
Luxembourg
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, Japan, and Korea worked for more than 30
years
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 to achieve the top salary
whereas
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 their counterparts in Australia, Denmark and only took less than 10
years
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. As can be seen from the table, secondary/ high school
teachers
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 in
Luxembourg
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 were offered 80000 dollars as their starting salary, compared to only 28000 in Australia. Denmark lagged behind
Luxembourg
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 with 45000, which was still significantly higher than the statistics of Japan and Korea, with 34000 and 30000 respectively. After 15
years
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 of career,
Luxembourg
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 topped the table with their
teachers
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 being paid 119000, and up to 132000 within 30
years
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. Japan came
next,
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where
teachers
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’ salaries nearly doubled in 15
years
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 and reached 86000 in 37
years
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. What stands out from the data is that Korean
teachers
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 were not paid as much as the other nations, with 48000 for 15
years
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. Working for 34
years
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, they had their pay rate more than doubled with 62000. There was
also
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 a significant increase in the figures for Australia and Denmark with 48 and 54 thousand respectively for 15
years
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.
Also
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,
teachers
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 in these two nations needed only around 9
years
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 to reach their highest pay, which is substantially small compared to the other remaining three countries

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, luxembourg, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salaries
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • global differences
  • economic disparities
  • valuation
  • compensation
  • socio-economic status
  • investment in education
  • regional similarities
  • living costs
  • government funding
  • qualification requirements
  • demand for teachers
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