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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do community work during their free time. This will benefit both teenager and community. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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A certain number of individuals believe that youngsters must engage in volunteering activities during their leisure time of the day which will be beneficial for
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's welfare and even the teenagers themselves.
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 I strongly agree with the advantages of
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work
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 for teenagers
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society
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, volunteering should not be mandatory or imposed strictly on young people. With regards to the pros of
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work
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, volunteering allows youngsters to
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 with a group or as a team collaboratively in terms of completing some tasks.
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 helps them learn to build strong relationships with a deep understanding of individuals and gain knowledge of cultures. Another example of
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 could be future opportunities.
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, when young people interact with
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work
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, they will gain experience and skills to open pathways in their careers.
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 of wasting time scrolling on social media, games and other unnecessary things, young people develop self–esteem, kindness and serving
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 brings happiness.
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 volunteering is beneficial, it should not be compulsory. Youngsters should not join volunteer
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 if it is against their own will. Creating an environment where
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 becomes an essential requirement might ruin the mental or physical health of the young generation. Taking responsibility with unwillingness could result in depression and harmful effects.
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, working under
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 circumstances may have a negative impact on becoming non-social in future with the fear of connection with
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.
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,
community
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 help is the platform allowing numerous benefits for teenagers which are required for every responsible and independent individual only if it is a choice or desire.
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