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the top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#priority #businesses #money #responsibilities
many
inviduals
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individuals
 think that
businesses
 want to make
money
with
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 the top
prioritiy
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priority
.
however
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, they do not
necessary
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necessarily
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to
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have public
responsibilities
.
this
 statement disagrees that their firms do not need to have responsible social. on the one hand,
businesses
 need to have responsible in
social
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 because of being
safty
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safe
 and good
products
. All of
products
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the products
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 they are making can sell out to
people
 who run out of
this
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these
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products
, so
businesses
 must check their
products
 clearly to make
believable
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them believable
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 of
people
 and have social
responsibitlities
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responsibilities
. It is evidence to help their
companies
making
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make
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 more
money
 with the top
of
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priority. the benefit of having social
responsibilities
 is
make
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to make
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 their
produces
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produce
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 develop and the flatter of
public
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the public
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 will
higher
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be higher
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. Many services in your firms will
famouse
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famous
 for areas and
lot
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 of
people
 can
be know
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be known
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 because of your quality.
on the other hand
, if their firms do not need to have public
responsibilities
, they will not have believable in
people
 and
also
 their
products
 will not increase
of
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in
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 selling in other countries. For
examble
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example
, many
produces
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products
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 they are making will make
costumers
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customers
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 suspicious,
confused
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and confused
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 and they will not buy any
products
 which are
companies
 produce.
That is
a
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 main reason
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that make
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make
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makes
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me
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I
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 believe that
businesses
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arebusinesses
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 necessary to have social
responsibilities
 and they will have prioritized
of
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apply
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making
money
,
it
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which
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 is important
with
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for
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 many
companies
 which need it. in conclusion, making
money
 is the priority which many
companies
 want to have.
therefore
,
businesses
 need to have public
responsibilities
 which make their priority
in
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social.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profit maximization
  • economic development
  • Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
  • shareholders
  • moral obligation
  • reputation
  • customer loyalty
  • sustainable business models
  • accountability
  • ethical practices
  • regulations
  • consumer expectations
  • economic sustainability
  • stakeholders
  • social impact
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