the top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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individuals
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safe
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products
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they are making can sell out to
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must check their
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clearly to make
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and have social
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responsibilities
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more
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priority. the benefit of having social
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because of your quality.
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, they will not have believable in
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their
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selling in other countries. For
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example
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they are making will make
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customers
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suspicious,
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and confused
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and they will not buy any
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which are
companies
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produce.
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make
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businesses
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necessary to have social
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and they will have prioritized
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making
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is important
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for
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many
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which need it. in conclusion, making
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is the priority which many
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want to have.
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,
businesses
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need to have public
responsibilities
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which make their priority
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social.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profit maximization
  • economic development
  • Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
  • shareholders
  • moral obligation
  • reputation
  • customer loyalty
  • sustainable business models
  • accountability
  • ethical practices
  • regulations
  • consumer expectations
  • economic sustainability
  • stakeholders
  • social impact
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