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Living abroad is better than staing in your hometown? Do you agree or disagree?

#hometown
There is no doubt that these days people prefer living abroad
than
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 staying in their
hometown
. I completely agree with
this
 argument. It is an essay I will discuss the benefits and negatives of living abroad. First of all, there are two main reasons why I agree that living outside is
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better than in a
hometown
. The first reason is
opportunity
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the opportunity
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of
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for
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 jobs. It is more available
in
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outside than in
hometown
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my hometown
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. It leads to
the
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 better life. The second reason is the facilities. The facilities of living aboard
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most
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best than in a
hometown
such
 as a hospital, schools and entertainment.
On the other hand
, a
hometown
 is best
live
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 than out .
On
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 of the main
is
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 nearest
of
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 your family and close to them.
For example
, you can see your parent
in
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 any time.
Moreover
, you feel more comfortable when you be in
country
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the country
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.
Also
, you know all of rules of the life in it than outside
country
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the country
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.
To sum up
, I mostly agree with living outside the country for a better living and it is a good chance for
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best job.
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