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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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 scheme illustrates the negative effect of tourists visiting the countryside on the environment. The most impactful negative effect of visitors that are walking in the countryside is trampling,they are damaging the grass that becomes flattened under their feet in the area. First of all the
vegetation
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 is affected,because,as tourists step on the ground,they are
also
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 stepping on plants and
vegetation
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 tends to become weaker.When
an
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full grown
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 adult presses
with
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apply
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his foot
a
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on a
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plant,it loses the ability to reproduce and grow
further
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.
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 results
into
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 reduced
vegetation
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 and after that erosion,
decreased
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and decreased
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 quality of soil and nature. Second of all,by trampling,
soil
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the soil
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 is compacted and becomes hard underfoot.
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Consequently
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 the air and water quality is reduced and plants do not reproduce,grow and
also
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this
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 increases the possibility of erosion that later results in reduced
vegetation
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.By adding all of
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 up,we get a decreased quality of soil and a worse type of life.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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