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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,
people
 have found ways to migrate to cities. It is argued that a vast majority of
people
 are migrating to downtown,
therefore
, peoples numbers are decreasing in the village. From my perspective,
this
 is a negative
development
 for the country.
To begin
 with, most of the
villagers
 want to move to the city for the betterment of their lifestyle.
For instance
, there are a huge number of
villagers
 who are still out of basic necessity
such
 as road
development
, educational facilities, hospital cares etc.
In addition
, if any citizen from the village falls sick, they need to travel a few hours or perhaps a day to reach hospitals for basic treatment.
This
 difficulty causes
due to
 lack of road
development
 and
people
 are dying and not getting appropriate treatment on time.
Therefore
,
people
 are moving to cities in search of easy and swift solutions to the aforementioned problems.
On the other hand
, citizens who are residing countryside are more healthy and energetic compared to others. To elucidate, some study shows that citizens from the village are proven to be smart and healthy. What's more,
villagers
' main source of energy is organic foods.
Although
 they have very limited resources and technology they tend to produce a huge quantity of organic foods, which they fulfil their economic needs.
Thus
, the government and local authorities both have to consider
this
 matter as a high alert and encourage
villagers
 to reside in the same place where they belong.
To conclude
, moving to cities for the betterment of one's lifestyle has been seen in so many countries worldwide, which is obviously a negative
development
 for the nation. To prevent
villagers
 from
this
 issue the lawmaker and local authorities both have to act instantly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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