In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Everybody knows that
technology
makes our life easy. Online shopping is very common nowadays. Because
,
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we live in modern times not antic times. İn the internet have some application
about
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for
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shopping many
people
like using the shop
centre
in
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the internet.
However
, some
people
like
go
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to buy in the
shop
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centre
on the street that's why, we couldn't say online shopping makes a positive development. İt is dependent
to
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akourdin
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online
shop
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shopping
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centre
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or
stores
. We can
explanation
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it
different
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ways. On the one hand, online shopping is very useful. Because, it gives us time, many chusing some
tihingor
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things
we can find a chip or good quality in the online shopping. That's why, we need it too much. Tany
country
contest in
the
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online shopping. We are living the
technology
, İf we
towant
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want
earn
money
and make our
country
powerful we have to use it.
for instance
, some engineers buy
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one machine
about
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his
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their
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job in Alibaba ablucatatin. They can find the machine very easily and cheaply. Alibaba's ablucatation from Chine and his
money
went to the
country
. The example shows us if we have a good online shopping
centre
we can earn
money
in all countries.
On the other hand
, online shopping has negative development. Because
,
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we have many
stores
on the street or mall. The
stores
have many workers and they
toneed
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need
earn
money
for their live.
However
, they live creuse when online shopping is common.
For example
, many
shose
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shoe
shoes
stores
closed day by day. Because
,
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people
buy
shose
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shoes
those
on Internet. İt is showing us online shopping makes negative develop.
To sum up
, online shopping has a good side and
bad
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a bad
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side it depends according what side you look
.
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İn my opinion, we live
technology
time, many
people
do not have time to buy. We should use it. İf we have
technology
's power our
country
gonna be powerful. ,İf we do not use it other
country
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earn our
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • remote areas
  • wide range of products
  • broad selection
  • price comparison
  • customer satisfaction
  • value for money
  • impact on local businesses
  • economic diversity
  • job losses
  • environmental implications
  • packaging waste
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • data privacy
  • cybersecurity
  • personal data
  • tactile shopping experience
  • immediate gratification
  • physically examined
  • robust measures
  • consumer information
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