The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015.

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bar chart illustrates the distribution of magazine types' sale rates by a company in three years 1975, 1995, and 2015,

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, there was an upward trend in sports magazine’s sale rate

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the opposite was seen in the sold publication of fashion.

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, the sale percentage of others fluctuates over 20-year periods. Obviously, the sport which witnessed an accelerated growth of 10% from 32 to 42% was the best-selling product.

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, the number of fashion journals sold plunged from 22% down to 5%, which was 5 times down, to become the poorest sales of the company.

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, the food magazine sales proportion fluctuated over the years. After a sharp increase, which was doubled from 10 to 20%, in 1995, it dropped back a half, which was back to the original point, at 10% in the next observed point.

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, that percentage of health declined a fifth from 26% and

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stable at 20%.

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, others fluctuated over the observed period.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuates" was used 3 times.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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