Some people argue that we should do research into their family history. Others, agree with the view that we should focus on the present and future generations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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with the development of society, families'

role

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, structure and the number of members are changing very fast. Some people put forth the argument that we should study

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family

history

while

others believe that we should concentrate on the present and

future

generations

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that

history

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an important role in

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modern

life

, including family

history

. Studying about the past

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us to learn

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ancestors

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achievements

and

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, which can improve our

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. It

also

takes part in the family tradition conservation.

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in Viet Nam keep the tradition of making

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poetry

products

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or restore some kinds of arts that their family

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to perform in the past.

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, family

history

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proud

of, so it can improve our mood and make us more

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with our

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On the other hand

, the concentration on the present and

future

generations

is crucial. From my perspective,

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about

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history

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history

is in the past we cannot change what

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happended

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happened

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, we can improve the

future

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our care

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education

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, health and

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of our children. In fact, in Viet Nam, just a

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number of

family

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families

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know clearly about their ancestors

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than 5

generations

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this

reality, we can conclude that

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about family does not have much

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on these days

life

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on the development of the next

generations

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several benefits to our society. To demonstrate, after the improvement of education in

Viet Nam

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Vietnam

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after 1945, we defeated France and America to gain our independence, and the

life

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of people and the economy of our country

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also

increased.

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on the next

generations

has many advantages in several factors

such

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and

life

satisfiaction

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satisfaction

. In conclusion, I believe that

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learning

about family

history

is important.

However

, focus on the

future

generation is more significant, because it

improve

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our

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community

comunity

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community

in many aspects

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