You have just read read in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter * Correct the information in the article * Example why it is important for the magazine to give correct information * Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

#travel #magazine #information #town #editor #article #situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing about

this

magazine that you completed it. As

matter

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a matter

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of fact, writing correct information is necessary

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for who

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who

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whom

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editor should observe in

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article. To be honest, when I

had

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apply

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read your paper, and you wrote incorrect

news

about my hometown,exactly I sad

that

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what

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you said about tourist attractions. In fact, writing adequate revelation is vital

especially

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,especially

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travel

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in travel

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magazine

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magazines

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Today's

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many people are looking for the right information about areas and so on. Since they like to receive or know exactly things to visit them. As

also

, lead to

famous

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a famous

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magazine, and people always buy your paper or they would advertise about

news

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the news

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. It

result

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results

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in more print and sell.

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, if the tourist

achieve

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correct

news

about cities, they will decide to see there in the future.

Otherwise

, they will regret it. I would like to suggest that you should write or do

this

situation.

This

news

can

be rectify

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and write

right

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the right

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information about my country, and you will consider more than before around cities. Thank you for your attention to

this

important matter. Kind Regards. Amin

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186 words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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