The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The maps illustrate how the layout of the school looked like in 2004 and the intended developments to it in 2024.

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there are some striking transformations with the appearance of one more building and car park to meet the increasing number of students in 2024 and the opening of a new road. As can be seen, a particular change is that a second car park is going to be constructed in the northeast of the site in order to have more space for parking. A road is

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opened which leads from the old car park to the new one.

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, the path linking the main entrance with the sports field will be cut shorter.

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, the sports yard will be relocated opposite the later parking lot.

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, a third learning building is planned to be erected there

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the estimation that there will be 1000 learners attending the school in 2024, compared to 600 in 2004.

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, the two first departments for studying will be connected so that it is easier for pupils to move.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say international sports event help in world peace? Do you agree or disagree?

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

Discuss advantages and disadvantages of watching horror movies.

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).