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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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The
increase
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 in population is considered to be one of the main issues in the world. Specifically in the developed areas which already have an abundance of toxic
gases
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, the increasing number of people day by day adds more to
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 issue. In
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 essay, I will explain the sort of problems arising, and at the same time, I will
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 highlight the steps to be followed by citizens and the government to overcome
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 issue.
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, we will address the problems that arise. Overpopulation causes several issues
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 as an
increase
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 in unsustainable acts, an
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 in toxic
gases
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, etc. These all could be very harmful and have a very serious impact on the
environment
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 and lead to severe damage that might be irreversible.
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, if
two
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 members are living in a house so they will need
two
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cars
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 only.
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, if more people started living in the house so the number of
cars
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 will
increase
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 and
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, where only
two
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cars
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 were intoxicating the
environment
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, now it will be more than
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cars
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 and end up more hazardous to the
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.
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, the good news is if we all follow sustainable activities that way we can stop our planet from being dirty and keep it clean and livable for the upcoming generations. We should involve in several practices i.e., prefer public transport over private vehicles, plant more trees etc, to keep our homeland safe and protected.
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, it is the job of each individual to be aware of damages that might happen
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 toxic
gases
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 from their vehicles. So, they should always opt for public transport and reduce dangerous
gases
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. Another example could be if government officials arrange workshops, campaigns, etc. To spread awareness regarding the decrease in population and how
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 could help in keeping our place green. In conclusion, I will say that
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 is our duty to control overpopulation not only in urban but
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 in the ruler areas so that our
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 remains green and develops the ability to produce only fresh air.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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