The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Sometimes it is argued whether traditional ideas are still valuable nowadays for the youth
generation
. I would argue that
although
their thought seems useless to some extent, the core idea is similar. There are several reasons why it could be argued that older generations’ ideas are useless.
Firstly
, it is true that the elderly
has
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more experience than the younger
generation
,
however
, most of them are incompatible now with the new technology.
For example
, iPhone is designed in the 2010s, which means that
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people who
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20 years old and 50 years old witnessed
this
at the same time.
Moreover
, the environment we are living
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quite different from the older
generations’
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. Take China
for example
, there are 1 million competing with 100 opportunities to study
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the best university.
However
, the people who took the university entrance exam have much less pressure than now.
However
, I would argue that
although
the situations we are facing are quite different, there are still some core ideas still working nowadays.
Firstly
, the spirituality we deal with in our lives never changed.
For example
, we can easily find that the older
generation
is harder than
this
generation
in both working and studying.Meanwhile,there are some experiences from our daily lives
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still useful.Our lifestyle changed a lot but we can not deny that
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behaviours are kept
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as in decades. In conclusion, I deem that
although
sometime
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the tips and suggestions from the elder might not
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anymore,
but
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we still should realize some advice are still capable now.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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