Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. What are the prosible reasons for this? Suggest some solutions to address this problem.

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There is no doubt that the health department
warnings
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about the dangers of smoking.
However
, a large number of people continue to
smoke
around the world. In the essay, I will discuss the several reasons for
this
argument and what are the solutions of it. First of all, there are various reason that leads most people to
smoke
. One of the main reasons is bad friends. Friends completely affect any decision and lead them to try anything new.
For example
, most of them tell that you will be more comfortable if you
smoke
and your mind will be clear from any problems that face you. The second reason is social media effects. It leads most people especially
teenager
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to try it. What is more , when the person
feel
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more pressure , he
go
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goes
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to take
smoke
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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