The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In modern society, the vast majority of
people
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to enjoy
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grab
and go foods to save their precious
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this
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, nowadays, every minute is valuable
due to
high
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competitions
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.
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, there are those
people
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that many convenience meals are unhealthy by
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added.
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essay argues strongly in favour of the latter position. On the one hand, it is certainly true that pre-cooked meals are contributing individual’s life a lot easier which it reduced huge amount of
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to prep
food
by themselves.
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,
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the
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meal production,
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they
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to use those
time
for more essential things.
For instance
, study, career,stock investment and so on.
As a result
, fast
food
is the one selection choice for
people
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amount of
time
. In
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of, it cannot be denied that plentiful of convenience fast
food
in stores or supermarkets
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chemicals that
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provide
many health issues in
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long term.
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the manufacturer just
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on their foods must
last
long on the shelves as much as possible and look more appetiser to purchase by carelessness their consumer effects. To illustrate the serious health issues,
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, heart attack, kidney disorder and so fore.
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,consumers should concern about
food
additives in takeaway meals that they purchased affect their long-term health as the drawback approach
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far greater than the
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. In conclusion,
although
convenience meal is
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choice for
time
saver
people
,
Food
additives can cause long-term serious
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effect. As my aforementioned of
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are extremely outweigh
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the advantages viewpoints.
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