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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information and make a comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information and make a comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the monthly expenditure of a family in the USA on
food
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 ,
gas
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 and clothing in 2010. It is clear from the chart that the average of dollars slightly increased in March and it suddenly fell down in April.
Overall
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, the amount of clothing and
gas
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 rise more in April than in January.
In other words
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, the amount of
food
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 and clothing steadily the same in February.
On the other hand
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 , the spending money on
gas
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 decreased by about 350 dollars. What is more, the monthly expenditure in March slightly rises in
food
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 than
gas
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 and clothing by about 100 to 120 dollars.
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, the average spending money in January on their items is different and the
food
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 increased than others.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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