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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart depicts the per cent of activities that
parents
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( either mother or father or both) involve their children in the evening in 2022. The y-axis denotes the % of
time
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 spent
while
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 the x-axis shows the various activities
such
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 as dressing, homework, playing
games
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as well as
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 preparing for bed that
parents
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 do.
Overall
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, the mothers spend the most amount of
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dressing their children( approximately 75%). The least the second-highest activity that engages both
parents
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 is playing
games
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( 70%). The least amount of
time
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 by fathers in general, for all activities,
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, the lowest being dressing the kids ( considerably less than 10%).
Subsequently
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, a trend is noticed where the mothers devote most of their evenings to their wards when compared to their counterparts. Homework(50%), preparing for bed( a little over 40%) and playing
games
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 ( around 25%) are the things done, in their decreasing order of
time
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 invested by mothers. Apart from playing
games
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, both
parents
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 are involved in putting their kids to bed( exactly 50%) and helping their wards with homework ( slightly less than 40%). In
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 case, it is observed that fathers alone do not spend a significant amount of their evenings with their children.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parents, time, games with synonyms.
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