In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

After developments and generation change, the use of mobile applications for daily transactions has increased by leaps and bounds.
Also
, it has been popular in many countries around the world.
However
, there are some advantages and disadvantages I would like to provide in the following paragraph.  
Firstly
, millions of
people
around the world own a smartphone, these devices offer many useful applications including
apps
for payments.
Secondly
, these
apps
offer you the chance to transfer money from your device to another device
while
using
QR
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a QR
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scanner only. Surprisingly, most
people
like to buy things using cellphone payment
apps
because it is just much faster than using cash
instead
.
Finally
, the main information of these
apps
is that no need to carry cash or
card
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, it is not required.  
Otherwise
, there are some disadvantages
for
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using these
apps
,
such
as
the
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people
are
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not friendly with
electronic
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and
internet
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the internet
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.
Furthermore
,
while
the device is out of battery outside
home
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there is no chance to pay.
Although
the payment is secure, there is a chance of fraud.
For instance
, we should strictly not provide
any
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own bank details to any random guy over the phone or in person.  
In addition
, the thing that happens to most
people
is random teenagers take their
parents
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cell
phone
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phones
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and start to order things
such
as toys, PSN cards and clothes after that pay
these
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things with only one click.       In conclusion, mobile
apps
for payment have made our life
a
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way easier because everything can be done with one click. But considering the drawbacks associated with is wise to not totally ignore it.
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