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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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In the world, the number of
people
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 is increasing dramatically every passing day.
This
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 situation leads to some problems and affects adversely many
people
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who are
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 especially homeless
people
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. That's why, some
people
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 think that the most effective way to help them is by providing them financial support.
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, I believe that other measures can be taken to make their lives better.
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 with, homeless
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 generally live on roads and they unfortunately fall into some bad habits
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 as alcoholism and drug use. When they are offered money, these
people
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 tend to spend it on these questionable and illegal habits.
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, a survey found that more than 80% of
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 living on roads use drugs regularly.
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, society should find some other ways of helping them
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 as providing them a meal or clothes rather than giving cash.
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, giving cash is a temporary solution to the problem because the government budget is limited. In
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light of
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 reality, the government should allocate their funds equally for other problems.
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this
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 reason, they should take other precautions to find a feasible solution to the problem of homeless
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.
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, the government can enable them to start a job. Thanks to it, they have a more regular life and lead a more fulfilling life.
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, sometimes the most obvious choice is to give some cash to the homeless.
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, we do not usually assume the consequences of that action.
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, we should take into consideration alternative methods.
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