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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycle are banned from the city centre. People are encouraged to use public transport such as buses, taxies and metro on vehicle-free day. To what extent do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today,
people
 have a variety of vehicle options to go anywhere.
However
, these vehicles lead to some environmental problems
such
 as air pollution, global warming, climate change and so on.
Therefore
,
people
 need a comprehensive plan to address the results of using vehicles. Some cities have
vehicle-free
 days to promote the use of public
transport
. In my opinion, despite some obvious drawbacks which should not be overlooked, I think the benefits of a
vehicle-free
 day outweigh. The advantages of using public
transport
 should be taken into consideration. The major benefit of using public
transport
 which should be
initially
 referred to is that
people
 can be more healthy and problems in the field of environment reduce sharply. Vehicle pollutants harm our health and contain greenhouse gases that cause climate change. If
people
 are unaware of climate change possibility, they will face its results which are famine, drought, and flooding.
For instance
, a survey found that more than 45% of
people
 living in cities which are not used public
transport
 have more risk to be asthma and breathing difficulties because of toxic gases. Another significant advantage of using public
transport
 is that it helps to protect nonrenewable energy resources which as oil.
Due to
 the ever-increasing number of
people
, nonrenewable energy resources reduce dramatically.
However
,
people
 need these energy resources because they are energy-rich and relatively cheap to process.
For
this
 reason, thanks to
vehicle-free
 days,
people
 can be aware of the detrimental effects of oil consumption.
To sum up
,
vehicle-free
 days are beneficial to prevent mentioned above adverse effects of using private vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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