The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Number of Employed Persons by Job Type and Sex, Australia, Last Year
The table illustrates seven different jobs and the number of heads in each job
according to
gender in Linking Words
previous
year. It is obvious that most of the employees were male except Add an article
the previous
two
job types.
Change preposition
for two
Overall
, Linking Words
majority
of men worked as tradespeople and Correct article usage
the majority
it
was 900 thousand Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
people Linking Words
of
clerical Change preposition
in
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
just
below that number. The least amount of men were engaged as laborers and it was 500 less than the highest value.
Add a missing verb
were just
In addition
,nearly 1000 Linking Words
of
women worked as clerical in Change preposition
apply
last
year Linking Words
although
their amounts 100 of both tradespeople and production sectors. Linking Words
Similarly
, there were 700 ladies Linking Words
were
professionals Correct pronoun usage
who were
Linking Words
that
is more than gents because male professionals were 600-700 Correct pronoun usage
which
in
Change preposition
apply
this
year.
Linking Words
However
, women had been working as Linking Words
laborers
which Change the spelling
labourers
was
Change the verb form
were
in
between 200-300. Change preposition
apply
It is clear that
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,
Remove the comma
apply
female
represent Fix the agreement mistake
females
laborers
as well Change the spelling
labourers
although
Linking Words
male's
amount less in Change noun form
males
this
type. Linking Words
However
, it was not passed Linking Words
gents'
numberCorrect article usage
the gents'
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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