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The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.
The chart illustrates data about
metro
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 systems in
London
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,
Paris
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 and
Moscow
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.
Overall
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, all three metros are huge and each of them leads in one feature shown in the chart. The
London
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 Underground is the longest,
Paris
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Metro
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 has the most
stations
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 and the
Moscow
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Metro
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 is the busiest.
Firstly
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 we can see that all three are huge underground systems and each one exceeds in exact features.
London
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 Underground is the longest one with 408km
length
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in length
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 in comparison with
Paris
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 and
Moscow
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 systems which are 214km and 308km respectively.
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 with ,length the most number of
stations
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 has
Paris
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Metro
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 with 300
stations
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.
London
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 Underground
stations
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 are nearly about to
Paris
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Metro
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 but
Moscow
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 Metros
stations
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 are about twofold fewer than
Paris
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Metro
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.
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Secondly
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 we can see the busiest
metro
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 is the
Moscow
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 subway with 6.5 million passengers daily which is more than twofold many than in
London
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 and
Paris
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Metro
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 is between them with daily passengers using.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, london, paris, moscow, stations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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