The ınternet has changed the way we communicate. Much communication today happens through social media. Some people support this and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media have negative effects. Discuss both this views and give your opinion.
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Task Achievement
You have clearly presented both viewpoints as well as your own opinion, which is excellent. Try to make your opinion even more prominent throughout the essay for a stronger argument.
Task Achievement
Your introduction effectively sets up the discussion. To enhance clarity, consider directly stating the main points you will discuss in the body paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay shows good logical structure, linking ideas smoothly. However, pay attention to paragraph structure to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for greater clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to indicate contrasts, reasons, and consequences more clearly. This will make your argumentation even stronger.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both views and your own stance, providing a balanced discussion.
Task Achievement
You provide specific examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your discussion.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example