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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows the information about the percentage of how parents spent
time
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 taking care of children in 2020 in the evening. It is clear from the chart that the
rate
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 of
fathers
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 is the lowest than the
rate
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 of mothers in all
time
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.
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, the mothers' percentage of
time
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 in dressing is higher than
fathers
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 only about 71%.
Also
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, the
rate
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 of them playing games
time
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 directly rises than in dressing
time
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 from 21% to 70%. What is more, the
rate
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time
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 of playing games is the same
time
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 of preparing for bed that
fathers
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 spent on their children and
fathers
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 slowly increased homework
time
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 by 10%.
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, the percentage of women's
time
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 in playing games directly fell down to dressing
time
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 by about 25%.
Furthermore
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, both of them
rate
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 preparing for bedtime
time
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 as the same as the mother's In homework
time
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 by 50%.rggfghgghhll. Dghhb. Guy.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, rate, fathers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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