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Some think that having ambition is a good quality. Is it important to be ambitious? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

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Humans are greedy creatures. Nothing will be enough for them.
Although
, it is a good quality to possess. And they want to achieve more and more heights in their
life
. So, being ambitious is significantly important for everyone. They can surpass their own limit and prove their worth.
However
, being too ambitious in
life
also
 detrimental to them. In
this
 essay, I will delineate its importance
as well as
 its benefits and drawbacks.
Life
 without a goal or an
ambition
 to achieve something is like, running without direction. You are going nowhere. There is a difference between human beings and animals, and
that is
 the goal to do something in
life
. We are nothing more than animals if one does not have
such
ambition
 in
life
.
Also
. if you decide to do something, and you are persistent about its success, you definitely achieve it. It does not matter if it is a small thing or a big one. The most important thing is that
,
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 you had an
ambition
 and you did it. And that will boost your morale and confidence as well.
On the other hand
, having an
ambition
 in
life
 has its advantages and adverse effects
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also
.
For instance
, it is good for one to have a dream or desire to do something that will secure his/her future. And if they attain it, it will be beneficial to that individual. But, wasting precious years behind an
ambition
 is foolishness.
In addition
, being over-ambitious
also
 has a bad impact on an individual or on his family. To recapitulate, everyone wants to attain heights in their
life
. But, with the cost of your well-being or happiness is not worth it.
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Develop your ideas more thoroughly to provide a more comprehensive response to the essay prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas in a more logical manner and ensure a clear introduction and conclusion for your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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