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sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion..

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In
this
 fast-growing era, sports is considered not only a
game
 but
also
 a profession.The popularity of sports has gained huge attention resulting in International Sporting events. There are many pros and cons of international events that will be discussed below.
To begin
 with, International sports like
Olympics
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 and FIFA have brought to the notice of many developing nations . The hosting
country
 gains the advantage of having its economic value increased as International games boost its economy.
In addition
 to that, there is development in the infrastructure of it
country
. Sporting events help in bringing and increasing Foreign exchange.
For example
, the latest FIFA
game
 hosted by Qatar in the year 2022 had given the audience a chance to not only enjoy the
game
 but
also
 a chance to understand different religions. Coming towards the cons of a sporting event, I believe that can be possibilities of unfair practices. The hosting
country
 if , is a developing or under-developed
country
then
 the government runs into a financial crisis in order to conduct the
game
 smoothly, which in turn takes their economy in
negative
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 balance.
Furthermore
, the building of huge stadiums may
leads
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 to deforestation as well.
For Example
, during the Olympics,India had to give up a huge chunk of forest area in order to build a stadium with the latest technology. To sum it up, keeping in mind the well-being of the individuals the government shall host the games in a manner
that is
 fair in all scenarios.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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