The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.

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This

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map looks at the infrastructure development of the Islip town

centre

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to the real situation at the present time.

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the illustration, the most significant change is the appearance of the circular road above the

centre

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. Nowadays, the main road

leans

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straight across the city,

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in the future inside

downtown

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only pedestrians will be allowed to be. After the reconstruction

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one line of shops will be left,

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of two of those.

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, there will be a shopping mall across the

shops

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line. It can be seen, that on the west of the shopping

centre

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, the bus station will appear,

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on the east

side

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the car park will be placed.

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, new housing will be provided next to the parking place.

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, the park will be

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his previous place, but its' size will be much less.

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, the presented data reveals the increasing of different kinds of facilities spread in the

centre

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of Islip.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

160 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Infrastructure
Redevelopment
Urban planning
Pedestrianization
Residential area
Landscaping
Community impact
Public transport
Commercial zone
Environmental footprint

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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.

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Some experts say that cyclists should take exams before they are allowed to ride on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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