The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.
This
map looks at the infrastructure development of the Islip town
centre
,
compare
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to the real situation at the present time.
According to
the illustration, the most significant change is the appearance of the circular road above the
centre
. Nowadays, the main road
leans
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leads
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straight across the city,
whereas
in the future inside
downtown
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only pedestrians will be allowed to be. After the reconstruction
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one line of shops will be left,
instead
of two of those.
However
, there will be a shopping mall across the
shops
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line. It can be seen, that on the west of the shopping
centre
, the bus station will appear,
while
on the east
side
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the car park will be placed.
Moreover
, new housing will be provided next to the parking place.
Also
, the park will be
on
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his previous place, but its' size will be much less.
Overall
, the presented data reveals the increasing of different kinds of facilities spread in the
centre
of Islip.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Redevelopment
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrianization
  • Residential area
  • Landscaping
  • Community impact
  • Public transport
  • Commercial zone
  • Environmental footprint
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