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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Marital Status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Marital Status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
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The pie charts illustrate the
people
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's civil status in two different countries as percentages. The marital status has broken into six categories for
Canada
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 and five groups for
Australia
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.
Firstly
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, in
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Canada
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,Canada
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 more than half the population
separated
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is separated
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, but they
are not get
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are not getting
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 legal approval. 29% of them are married and 18% of the community has several marital status
such
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 as 7% of them never married and
the
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a
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 similar proportion are widows.The Least amount of
people
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 have got
divorce
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divorced
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 and 3% of them are homosexual.
Secondly
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,
Australia
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 has not
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriages as
Canada
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. The separated
although
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 they are not divorced
amount
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amounts
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41
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to 41
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% of
total
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the total
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 population. The married proportion is 46% which is the highest number in
Australia
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while
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 single, widows and
divorce
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divorced
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 are 5%,6% and 2% respectively. When considering charts,
the
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apply
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fewer
people
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 are in
divorce
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the divorce
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 section in both countries. There are more
people
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 in
Canada
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 who are separated but not divorced than in
Australia
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.
However
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, marriages
is
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are
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 higher in
Australia
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 than
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Canada
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in Canada
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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