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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line chart provided reveals the tourist numbers who visited a specific Caribbean
island
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 throughout a 7-year period of time.
Overall
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, as can be vividly seen from the graph, the total number of tourists visiting the
island
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 climbed drastically.
Furthermore
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, at
first,
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the number of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 was higher than that of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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,
whereas
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,
at the end
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 of the period shown,
this
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 pattern twisted. As illustrated by the chart, starting from nearly 750,000
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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,
this
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 way of visiting was more popular than staying on
cruise
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ships
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, at approximately 250,000.
Afterward
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, by 2015, both figures had undergone a considerable increase, with 1.5
million
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visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 and almost 1.25
million
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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.
By contrast
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, the figure for those staying on the
island
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 declined by 0.5
million
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 in the following year, being overtaken by the other cluster, before reaching 1.5
million
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 again in 2017. The figure for staying on
cruise
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ships
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,
however
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, continued its onward march to 2
million
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 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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