The pie chart and table below give information on tourists visiting Australia.

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The given pie chart and table illustrate information about visitors to

Australia

such

as their nationalities and average length of stay.

Overall

, most visitors to

Australia

come from Asia followed by Europe.

In addition

, American people have the longest time spent there. As can be seen, Asians have the highest population of tourists visiting

Australia

with 37% which is just 2% more than Europeans

while

Americans and citizens from the rest of the world visited the country with 18% and 10% respectively. Regarding the table, the longest travel time (16 days) to

Australia

is for American dwellers whose popular activities are swimming and sunbathing and who prefer accommodation in a campground or caravan park. Plus, the average length of stay for European people is 2 days less than for USA tourists and they usually stay in 4 stars hotels and are interested in sightseeing.

Although

Asians have the maximum number of tourists in the country, they just stay for a week in 5-star hotels. They enjoy sightseeing the most as well. It is

also

noteworthy to mention that, other travellers from other places, like Americans, usually stay in a campground or caravan park for 10 days and they go surfing for most of their time.

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The pie chart and table below give information on tourists visiting Australia.

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