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Memorization of information by frequent repetition (rote learning) plays a role in most education systems. Do the advantages of this method of learning outweigh its disadvantages?

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 our education, there are numerous learning methods that can help you to deal with a large number of
information
.
Rote
 learning is a memorising skill using frequent
repetion
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repetition
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in
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 appropriate time which
suitable
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is suitable
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 for many
learners
.
While
 acknowledging that there drawbacks,
this
 essay will argue that
rote
 learning benefits outweigh its disadvantages.
Firstly
,
rote
 learning is extremely useful for
learners
 who have to remember
much
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information
 in
short
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the short
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 time period.
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spaced
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 repetition
method
,
it
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can stimulate the brain to bear the
information
 quickly because
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the brain
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likely
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 to
relise
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realise
 and adapt to something that it
meet
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 frequently.
Furthermore
,
learners
 attending in social educational fields who have to keep a lot of knowledge consider
rote
 learning the excel way not to forget previous
information
 when
obtain
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obtaining
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 something new.
For instance
, History
learners
 use
this
method
 to memorise historical time
line
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lines
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 and events.
On the other hand
,
this
method
 can be
double-edged
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a double-edged
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 sword if
student
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students
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 rely on it too much.
Rote
 learning
user
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users
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 can have problems in analyzing new and strange problems because they are used to
relizing
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realising
 familiar
information
.
Instead
 of understanding the whole concept, which leads them to clarity, they only remember specific
information
.
Therefore
,
this
method
 can
also
 be a barrier for students striving for academic education. In summary,
this
method
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 pros and cons for primary
learners
. It
make
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 students hard to adapt
new
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 knowledge but if it can be used appropriately,
rote
 learning benefits will overshadow the drawbacks.
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