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It has become more easier and more affordable for people to travel to other countries. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples from your experience.

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It has always been argued that nowadays, it is quite convenient to go to other countries and at a reasonable price. In my opinion, it is a welcome development and
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 essay shall dwell upon my perspective in subsequent paragraphs. Foremost, why has migration become easier and more affordable?
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 is because
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it creates job opportunities. To elaborate, when
people
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 go to other continents
for exploring
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to explore
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, they have to require everything
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 as food outlets, shopping stores and many more where many
people
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 may do jobs and it reduces unemployment.
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, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that 65% of
people
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 visit Thailand as
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 a tourist spot and it gets occupation to jobless individuals.
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, with the advancement of digitalization
people
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 might to another country
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reasonable
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 price and in
short
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time
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. In the past
time
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, humans used to go by
ships
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 to
the
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another
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other
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counrities
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countries
counties
 which
was
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 far away from their nation and it
consumes
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 more
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 these days it is easy to go anywhere with the assistance of technology.
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, an article published by The Tribune newspaper showed that approximately 75% of mankind have been satisfied with the invention of aeroplanes because it is
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 and affordable rate.
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, I personally believe that it to be a favourable effect it not only generates many job opportunities but
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 saves
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task response
Your response provides relevant points, but some of them are not clearly developed or supported with examples. Try to expand on your ideas and provide specific details to support your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction of your essay briefly outlines your perspective, but the conclusion is rather brief. Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize your main points and perspective.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements in transportation
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Economic reasons
  • Globalization
  • Educational opportunities
  • Digital nomadism
  • Healthcare tourism
  • Tourism industry growth
  • Personal development
  • Interconnectedness
  • Higher living standards
  • Remote work
  • Broaden their horizons
  • Affordable travel
  • Medical treatments
  • Global perspective
  • Air travel options
  • Cuisines
  • Lifestyles
  • Job opportunities
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