It is important for children to learn difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them to learn this distinction.

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There are 2 types of people. Some believe that should not strictly educate
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at an early age. Let them choose for themselves what they want. But others are on the side of showing
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from childhood what is good and what is bad. In my
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we should from an early age tell, explain and
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the main qualities of character are formed in
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sense of self-sufficiency, and if they are punished for bad deeds for educational purposes, they can grow insecure,
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in the future will not be able to stand up
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themselves, stand up for their rights. They
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believe that the child himself should choose what should he do, whether it is bad or good, because over time
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when he grows up, he himself will understand all his mistakes and decide for himself what to do next. Others completely disagree with
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you need to start accustoming them to everything.
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child did something good, you need to praise him, and if he did something wrong, you need to show him how to do it. But how to be in situations when
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deliberately act badly? In
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moments they are not against punishment. Punishment should not be severe. It will be enough to reduce the time they spend
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watching TV, not let
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outside with friends,
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to buy a new thing for a
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until they realize their mistakes. They believe that
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modern parents are too protective of their
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, allowing them everything,
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become unbalanced, capricious,
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.
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to respect the tastes of their other people. In the end, neither one nor the other can come to an agreement. Since they are all different
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, some become smarter after being punished and begin to act differently, and someone out of spite acts even worse. Every child needs an individual approach to
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. My opinion is that the
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should be punished during education and explain why
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got it.
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