The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
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of
trips
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per year made by children aged 5-12 in a single country between 1990 and 2010, using different types of
transportation
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to travel from school. The
transportation
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modes include car
passenger
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passengers
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, walking, cycling, walking and
bus
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, and
bus
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. As shown in the chart, in 1990, the
number
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of
trips
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made by children as car passengers was approximately 4
million
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.
However
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, the most popular mode of
transportation
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in 1990 was walking, with nearly 13
million
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trips
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.
Additionally
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, cycling accounted for almost 6
million
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trips
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in the same year. Walking combined with
bus
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trips
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was slightly less than 6
million
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,
while
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bus
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trips
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without walking accounted for more than 6
million
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. Moving on to 2010, there were significant changes in the
transportation
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preferences of children. The
number
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of car passenger
trips
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increased to almost 11
million
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.
Conversely
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, the
number
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of walking
trips
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decreased to 6
million
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. Cycling
also
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experienced a decline, with only 2
million
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trips
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in 2010.
However
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, the combined
trips
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of walking and
bus
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showed little change during those 20 years. In conclusion, in 1990, the previous generation had a higher
number
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of
trips
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using various types of
transportation
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.
Nevertheless
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, as time progresses, each new generation may experience different changes in their
transportation
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choices.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, trips, transportation, bus, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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