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All children should learn a second language at school. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#children #second #language #school
I strongly agree with the statement " All children should learn a
second
language
 at
school
". The reason why
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 agree
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 statement is described below.
Firstly
, there are so many advantages
for
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 learning
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a
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second
language
such
 as
student
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students
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 will learn about
other
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another language
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language
. If the children will learn more and more
then
 it will to helpful for them to face
reailty
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reality
 about
things
.
Paresent
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Parents
 should
ancourage
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encourage
 their
kids
 to do more and more
things
. Learning more and more about
things
. If the
kids
 will learn
second
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language
then
 it will be easy to
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 with other nations.
For example
, if a child at a
school
 will learn
english
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then
 it will be easy for her to go
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other country
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another country
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. On
other
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 side, getting more and more knowledge about
things
 help
a
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people to solve
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 problem. Government should
made
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rule
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a rule
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 for every
school
 to teach about
differnt
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different
language
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languages
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 every year.
Student
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Students
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 should
ancourage
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encourage
a
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insitution
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institution
 to teach about
new
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language
. If
a
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insitution
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institution
teach
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new
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language
then
 the
kids
 should give proper
responsites
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responses
. If
teacher
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the teacher
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 will add a
second
language
then
 it will be better for the
kids
 to learn it. If a citizen
learn
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second
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language
then
 it benefited
for
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both human
as well as
 nation.
For example
, if
student
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the student
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 will learn
second
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a second
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language
then
 if he
go
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 to the USA
then
 it will
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to
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both. In conclusion, as
second
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language
 plays
an
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 great role in our lifestyle so,
from
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the above information describes
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advantage
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for
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 learning
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a secound
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secound
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second
language
 at
a
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apply
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school
. So
its
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 good for
the
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people if they learn about
second
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language
 at
a
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school
.
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