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All children should learn a second language at school. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#children #second #language #school
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I strongly agree with the statement " All children should learn a
second
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school
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". The reason why
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 statement is described below.
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, there are so many advantages
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 learning
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second
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such
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student
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students
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 will learn about
other
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another language
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language
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. If the children will learn more and more
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 it will to helpful for them to face
reailty
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reality
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Paresent
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Parents
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encourage
 their
kids
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 to do more and more
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. Learning more and more about
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. If the
kids
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second
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language
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then
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 it will be easy to
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 with other nations.
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, if a child at a
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then
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 it will be easy for her to go
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other country
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. On
other
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 side, getting more and more knowledge about
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people to solve
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 problem. Government should
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rule
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 for every
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 to teach about
differnt
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different
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languages
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 every year.
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 should
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encourage
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insitution
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institution
 to teach about
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insitution
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institution
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new
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language
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then
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 the
kids
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 should give proper
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responses
. If
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 will add a
second
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 it will be better for the
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second
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language
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 it benefited
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both human
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student
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 will learn
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second
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language
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then
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 if he
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 to the USA
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 it will
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to
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both. In conclusion, as
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an
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 great role in our lifestyle so,
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the above information describes
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advantage
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for
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 learning
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secound
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second
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people if they learn about
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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