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The table gives information about the amount of money in developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010.

The table gives information about the amount of money in developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010.
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The table provides a comprehensive comparison of the amount of
money
 in 3 kinds
developing
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of developing
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country
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countries
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 (
USA
, EU and Others) during 5 years period between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
, the total amount of
money
 gradually increased between 2006 to 2010.
USA
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The USA
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 had the highest number of capital from 2006 to 2010. In contrary, Other
coutries
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countries
 remained the least
of
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money
 resources in five
distict
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distinct
 periods. Upon the observation,
USA
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the USA
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 experienced slowly increased from 9.8 in 2006 to 11 in the next year.
Furthermore
, there was a significant rise in 2008 around
to
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17.
However
, the
USA
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US
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money
 slightly decreased in 2019 (16.7) and it reached
the
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a
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 peak which accounts for 20.3 in 2010.
On the other hand
,
EU
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the EU
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 and other countries had relatively similar
about
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the
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amount of
money
. In 2006, they started
from
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at
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 3.1 and 2.8 respectively. In
additon
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addition
, they encountered the same pattern
with
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as
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USA
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the USA
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 where their
capitals
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capital
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 continuously went up to 3.8 and 3.5 in 2008 and slowly declined in 2009.
Finally
, both
EU
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the EU
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 and other
countried
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countries
bounched
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bounced
 back to their peaks in 2010 around 4.1 and 3.7, respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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