The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie graphs illustrate the main reasons that drive
people
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people
under 30 and over 30. Use synonyms
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people
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people
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people
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while
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people
over 30 is 10%.
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