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In some countries, university education is free for every citizen. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#countries #university #education #citizen
In order to popularize
further
education
 level to all walk of life,
education
 services in many countries around the world
is
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 free of charge and available for every
students
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student
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 which contribute hugely to the potential future of that country,
however
,
this
 project might seem
lack
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of
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benefits for
people
 in the
education
 field
such
 as teacher or educator.
This
 essay will argue that the advantages of free college
education
 outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, a case in point of beneficial free
university
education
 can be seen in India, where
government
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 have decided to
launched
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 free teaching service for thousands of underprivileged students to
had
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good
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a good
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 opportunity to reach advanced knowledge,
thus
increased
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 labour and employee sources
as well as
 produced decent literate population for the country in general and that area
in particular
.
Furthermore
,
Education
 is the most powerful weapon of a nation,
this
 statement once again
consolidating
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 the significance of teaching and studying especially
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in
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an
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 enhanced level
such
 as
university
 where
student
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students
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 can be navigated to future
occupation
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occupations
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.
On the other hand
, an institution that cost nothing can
associated
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 with disadvantages for
education
-related
people
 namely
teacher
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teachers
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,
educator
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educators
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 or
tutor
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tutors
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.
Those
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people
 whose mainstream income come from the act of
convey
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 lecture and
emphasize
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 comprehension for pupil, free
education
therefore
 cannot ensure a sustainable salary. Take China for an example, numerous
of
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Chinese
university
 lecturers have been voicing their objections to the free
education
 plans of the
ministry
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 of
education
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Education
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due to
 the fact that their revenue has been significantly curbed since the
implement
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. In conclusion,
although
 there might be confronted some drawbacks in
university
 without charge, it is undeniable that
this
education
 campaign can fetch an enormous victory in
improvement
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the improvement
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 of human resources and contribute to a brighter future for
people
 in all social
hierarchy
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hierarchies
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.
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