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Some people say that all students should study history as a major subject, while others feel that other subjects are important for children today. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is said that by knowing
history
 one can pave the way for a better future. Some argue that the past must be taught as a main subject
while
 others say that other
subjects
 are more important in the modern
world
. In
this
 ,essay I will discuss about that the two viewpoints and give my opinion on the subject.
While
 its important to be abreast with the technology in the modern
world
 and other
subjects
 related to it, its crucial that one must
also
 understand how humans were able to come so far and that part of
history
 so it is not only important but necessary to know the past which teaches about the mistakes
as well as
 good things.
For example
, If a person is developing a new material that might help in the advancement of technology. It's integral to know what efforts and experiments were made in the past which yielded positive results and the ones which were not so fruitful.
Furthermore
, It's important to be aware of the former times of the
world
 because it helps us understand the changes that have taken place which the passage of time. Having said that, it's important to understand that in the modern ,
world
 children will need knowledge of modern
subjects
 that will help in their
overall
 development and make them ready for the challenges of the new age. It will equip them in getting jobs and
further
 develop their technology. In conclusion, It's vital for all learners to know and understand
history
along with
 other
subjects
 that will make them future-ready for the development of the human race. A balanced approach must be adopted in teaching learners with the right mix of
subjects
 helping them understand
history
 and empowering them to excel in future.
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