Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjets that will be useful for their future careers. Other people say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

While
some people think that institutes need to focus on students' study materials which are necessary for their bright and successful careers, I believe
sports
and music are
also
important to relax and enhance their creativity.
Firstly
,extra
activities
make children happy and help to relax them from their boredom schedule. They easily exhaust themselves by doing any activity
such
as studying. That's why, they need free
time
to do
sports
and music to be fresh and active.
For example
, UK schools prefer to give more
time
to small children to do
sports
and other
activities
which allows them to have joy and feel more
time
to adapt to the environment of the school.
Secondly
,education gives only theoretical knowledge but students need practical information as well to implement their learning things
therefore
,
sports
play a significant role in teaching. That's why teaching methods are modified with
time
which gives more sense to students to understand things.
For instance
, many researchers claim that everything is based on science even though our daily works come under the actions and efforts which individuals put to do that. In conclusion,
although
, academics are necessary to get a good job, other
activities
are
also
important for the
overall
development of children. without these ,
activities
they can not get proper knowledge and fitness in their life.
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