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These days the fashions in clothing are constantly changing. Is this affecting individuals and the environment in a positive or a negative way? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

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Today there are many people influenced by clothing and
fashion
 ,especially teenagers
that
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all have bad effects social and
individual
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,In my ,essay I will explore the benefits and the negative way of
this
 behaviour with examples .
According to
 cyberspace and a huge ,change people be more open to other thing things , the most one we can all observe fashions around the world it is too easier to see and tends to imitate it ,specifically youth and teenagers ,for several reasons ,exemplify the celebrities of social media,they like to wear the same
clothes
 even it is related to own culture or not ,that
As a result
 for affected ,
furthermore
,that
fashion
 gave them a feeling of confidence, Another point individual prefer by spend money to bought
fashion
clothes
 to show others they wear brands Instance' shakier ' ,In another said , and I strongly believe that has many unhealthy impacts, we can start with the human being's health when he bought and wears undesirable things every
time
 by the long
time
 the feeling of self will change , the money of models say that the keeping wears the
clothes
 that depending to your test or to your choice created exhaustion senses for boday , over
time
 we will lose part of our self ,which makes happiness dramatically go down .,
Moreover
 the sales of
clothes
 have decreased in some way because of the change in
fashion
 every day that makes many companies can't be in the same age
fashion
 ,
To conclude
, I oppose the view of
fashion
 because I think it is west of my
time
 and money , I like to do everything that belongs to my needs and senses without caring for any things else. and the people should understand that point and wait before they decide to buy.
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