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Nowadays kajy people choose to be self-employed, rather that to work for a company or organaisatiom, why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed

#kajy #people #work #company #organaisatiom #be #case
There is no denying the fact that
world
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the world
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 is enormous and there are thousands of jobs you could choose
.
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from.
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While
 it is a commonly held belief that, these days many individuals have a desire to
work
 for themselves,
instead
 of working for an organisation or association
This
 essay will discuss
this
 case, and outline the drawbacks of being self-employed. On the one hand, if you
work
 for a corporation or a company you already have an idea about your salary
at the end
 of the month.
In other words
, it opposite in self jobs which decreased and increased occasionally.
In addition
, humans have patience and commitment in their job.
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example
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 if you
work
 for
government
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a government
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 or a private company you have signed
to
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apply
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their policy it
include
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includes
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 promise,
such
"you
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as "you
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 cannot be late
in
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for
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work
 time,
also
miss
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 attending will tax from your salary".
On the other
hand
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 there are many downsides to working for yourself, in some cases you
not
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do not
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work
 hard and the process
related
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is related
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 to your psychic. It is
also
 possible to say that, there is no one to stress you,
also
 you could
work
 at any time, you will give yourself many holidays.
Moreover
, in horrible situations sometimes you will fail and be hampered by debts.
For
instance
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work
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working
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 in law and
lost
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losing
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 cases that will take your reputation down,
also
work
 as
business
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a business
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,
such
 sold and
bought
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buying
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 items is
danger
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dangerous
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. In conclusion, there are many disadvantages that I have not written it down.
Also
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,Also
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 it is true that would be a tangible case eventually.
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