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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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Chorleywood village is illustrated in the map from 1868 to 1994. Most of the development has been observed
during
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 1970 to 1994 and the least development was seen
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1868
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the 1868
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 to 1883 time period. Moderate transformations have been recorded from 1883 to 1970.
Due to
 the construction of the railway in 1909, it can be seen that most of the
inhabitatnts
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inhabitants
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occupied the areas close to the railway from 1883 to 1970.
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, when the
moterway
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motorway
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1970, the population
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increased around the motorway
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 1970 to 1994. More area towards the motorway and the
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main road
 is being developed as there is more connectivity to the other cities and villages. The
devlopments
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developments
 seem to be happening around
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chorleywood
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Chorleywood
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 park and
golf
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 course. Over the years from1868
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 1994, the population has increased gradually which has
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 to
the
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 increase in
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the developments
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developments
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 of the village.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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