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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problrms. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language #problrms
It would be so hard for
immigrates
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immigrants
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 to live in a country
that
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where
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 all the
people
 are speaking in
the
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a
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 language which is not their mother
toungue
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tongue
 language. There will be not only a lot of social issues but
also
 practical problems. I
am completely agree
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 with
this
 statement. It is
obvios
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obvious
 that, each individual who
are
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is
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 foreign can not easily communicate with
people
. That would be so hard for them to listen carefully and understand each accent and
figureout
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figure out
 each word as fast as the native speakers speak.
Moreover
, they may forget or
do
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not
aware
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 of the
hole
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whole
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 complex idioms that all the
people
 use in their communication speech. Not only they will be frustrated but
also
 they may become a reserved individual in
the
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apply
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society.
On the other hand
, they can not have an appropriate job because of their lack of confidence and speaking problems.
For example
, they can not adapt to the culture of that country or
making
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make
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 new
connection
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connections
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 and friends. They may suffer from
bulling
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bullying
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 in high schools or
univercities
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universities
 because of the way that they pronounce each
letters
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letter
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 and
words
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word
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. That would make more pressure
besides
 anxiety and
lonlliness
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loneliness
 on the new member of a country which is far from their homes and families. In conclusion, the disadvantage of living in
a foreign countries
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a foreign country
foreign countries
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 is
just
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that just
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 started when you arrive at your
distination
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destination
.
Although
, it has several positive points
but
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the native language of that city is a big concern for many
people
, not only socially but
also
partically
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partially
particularly
.
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